Komik: BADAI

[Mustar Joe]

Ini cubaan aku untuk menghasil sebuah komik digital bersiri. Satu siri 8 muka. Ini muka pertama siri pertama.

Mintak komen membina nkorang semua.

TITLE:  B A D A I
GENRE:  DRAMA/FANTASY

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[eusebiaharbin50]

WoW! 

[qoxfabian85434]

nampak macam dah best dah cerita ni… nak lagi…

[mysticmind]

layan line international ke skang? 😮

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

nAK TRY submit kat Zuda.com

[niJam]

wah..best..

teruskan
…akhirnya ada wakil M'sia utk Zudacomics

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

tERIma kasih atas galakan. Aku ni ada perangai malas sikit. Selalu stop tengah jalan. Tapi yg ni aku akan siapkan at least 8 muka. Skrip dah ada sampai siri 5.

[date Connie and Lorraine www.dropfilms.ru]

wow. cite ni berlatar belakang scene di negara2 afrika ke malaysia ke? benout?

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

wow. cite ni berlatar belakang scene di negara2 afrika ke malaysia ke? benout?

Ermmmm…I'd like to keep the geographic location ambigous,so as to make the story more universal.

Dan juga utk mengelakkan aku kena tahn bawah ISA.

[meet Jessie and Stephanie www.liekmanis.com]

hebat! semoga berjaya..

[eric1988]

cool! kipidap! jgn stop tgh2 jalan beb! aku suka 1 page atas tu nye storytelling.. cool! (if ko beratkan skit stroke pada character agaknya lagi smart kot – just pendapat aku je), stroke ko dah ok and ada nilai sendiri

KIPIDAP!!!

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

makasih d4z.
Maaf kerana lambat sikit mengupdate- sibuk sungguh sekarang ni.Kerja kat office berlambak sampai aku tak tau mana satu nak buat (:. Sebenarnya aku buat komik ni salah satu sebab dia is as an escape from the pressure of office work.
Kalau bolehbuat duit lukis komik kan ke best..tak de la tensen sgt.

[chat Elizabeth and Emma www.belstil.com]

eh… lukis komik ni xbole buat duit ke rupanya?
moga dgn adanya persatuan penggiat komik Malaysia (Pekomik) persepsi atau realiti ini tidak kekal di negara kita…

anyway: semua karektor dewasa nampak cam negro pd mata aku la… tp overall… komik ko terlalu best la utk dipublish dlm bentuk web komik semata2… panjangkan lagi buat novel grafik n jual la… kn buat duit tu…

all da best… nnti aku support bila da kuar kt zuda. :pompom:

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

mACAM NEGRO ke..mungkin gak kot. Initially aku nak wat muka Jawa gitu..Tapi jadi muka negro lak. Lagi satu aku realise kelemahan aku ialah nak lukis muka character yg consistent. muka character aku asik berubah2 jer..Camana nak buat ek?. ANy tips?

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

ok. page 4-6 are up.

2 muka lagi.Week end ni laa aku buat.Malas nak kaler.

btw, ni ada komen dr sorang mat saleh ttg komik ni..Bagus aa diaorg ni dlmmemberi pendapat..

It's an interesting story. Not something you'd often see in a webcomic. Originality is a plus, as it's an attention-grabber. Coloring the first few pages also adds to that. The bubbles are well-done, but there is an issue with the text inside them…it's slightly too small. I'm on a midsize monitor resolution (1280 x 1024), and have a bit of trouble reading the smaller lettering. Increasing the size somewhat would be a good idea, since people will not stick around for your comic if it's tough to read along.
The characters are believable and the story moves smoothly, with a few exceptions. One panel in particular jumped out at me. In the upper right of the last page, when Badai is struck by the officer, the dialogue runs too much. By the time you reach the “No”, the emotional impact of seeing Badai being hit has passed. I'd shorten it or migrate a bit back to the previous panel.
Finally, there were some grammatic errors. I cannot be having with this. Page three, “His birthday's coming soon…U know?” Chatspeak is an absolute no-no. Also in the same page, a period is left off at the end of “Yes, yes…I remember”. I know you can't see it, but for your information I bolded the space where there is no period.
All in all, not too bad. I see your genre makes mention of fantasy. You might want to indicate that somehow earlier on or in your website layout, because all I'm seeing is drama and if I was more interested in the fantasy aspect, I'd stop reading before I got to it.

[chat Rebecca and Marie www.igorboston.com]

wooo.. bro ni dah kire ok sgt2 dah.. aku tabik ko! cuma aku arap ko x buat spruh jalan.. aku pun ade pnyakit sama gak kalo keje x siap dlam satu ari aku akan abaikan.. susah nak sambung! cerita ko, konsep dan presentation ko dah ada identiti…caiyo! caiyo!

[Rose has left you 5 messages www.mobil-explorer.com]

gerek sehhh…!!!

[kimberlee.sattler2003]

thank u..thank u..ok nanti kau siapkan..at least episode 1

[nastreme]

hhmmm…that's a very unique storyline. a story that depicted the reality of what is happening in all part of world. keep it up bro. tak sabor nak tgk dia punyer climax.

[date Jill and Ada www.greenmolot.com]

waaaaa besh besh style pekomikan ko besh la aku sker hahaha

[date Ann and Beryl www.megacentr.com]

mcm best je komik ni…mana sambungan dia…x puas baca lg ni.

[meet Brandi and Martha www.3darc.ru]

cam sedih je cite dia

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